Ames' syllabi

4D Final Feedback: 

Lily:

• What works: Using light as a prop, the sound effects
• What I would do: Better audio (more clear and loud)

Gabby: 

• What works: Variety of shots and settings
• What I would do: Add music or focus more on the sounds. Also add some sort of indicator on what the story is

Murrow:

• What works: Sound effects!!! And story
• What I would do: Work on camera movement and materials

Alieena: 

• What works: The speed changing and light experience, the 360 interactive experience 
• What I would change: Make it into a shot sequence for presentation purposes and story purposes, add music to heighten emotional feel (but do keep revving and things like that) 

Chrystian: 

• What works: Color scheme and grey pads/platforms work well for the PGH feel, definitely entertaining and something I would play in middle school
• What I would do: UI when controls pop up (background could be blurred for easier reading) maybe add a learning mode

Nikayla:

• What works: Camera movement following subject, crossfaded clock, story is fitting and relatable
• What I would do: Make the opening blackboard thing shorter, get different angles from where subject is sitting

Antonia:

• What works: Very humorous
• What I would do: Make it horizontal, better editing 

Ethan: 

• What works: Frame speed, lighting
• What I would do: Work with the cropping (it felt weird), maybe a black background?

Tyler: 

• What works: Game works well and stopmotion really tapped into that with the graphics
• What I would do: Would crop better, get a tripod because it was shaky

Bedzok: 

• What works: Making us actually scroll was super interactive and worked with the point of the story
• What I would do: Make this into a stop motion and have that on the instagram (but keep the photos 

Saomi: 

• What works: Editing is very smooth, makes sense, aesthetically pleasing 
• What I would do: Maybe make it quieter

Sidney: 

• What works: Spinning it, showing the “experiment” 
• What I would do: Add more shots, close up of the movement and subjects 

Noah: 

• What works: The mix on animation and real life (being shown on tv) and animation helping cook 
• What I would do: Maybe some foley work/sound effects 

Gaige: 

• What works: The animation art style, black and white to color 
• What I would do: I would make the person in the animation do the adobe messed up, and then have him dance and then switch to irl person dancing, sound levels 

Jana: 

• What works: Its interactive and luck based (it fits that) 
• What I would do: The negative and positive confuses me a bit. Maybe having the cards more random, maybe have them be like tarot cards and you pick the number, flip the card and your fortune is there

Kayla: 

• What works: I like the message and the animation is good, loved the flicker
• What I would do: I would love to see more 

Gavin: 

• What works: The story, narrative game type of perspective (the hand is like granny or roblox if you know what I mean)
• What I would do: Footsteps are pretty sporadic and don’t seem accurate, maybe add some tense music 

Lily

Works: The lighting shots with the shadows were really cool!

Doesn’t: I didn’t like the long talking clips.

Gabby

Works: I enjoyed the lack of voiceover.

Doesn’t: I didn’t like the lack of all sound.

Murro

Works: The sounds along with the different mediums worked and how they changed intensity.

Doesn’t: I wish the perspective changed instead of just being the same.

Aileena

Works: 360 experience, SO cool especially on the phone.

Doesn’t: Viewing it on the laptop doesn’t work as well.

Chrystian

Works: The mechanics and the concept were really cool.

Doesn’t: Not necessarily that it doesn’t work, just that it is a hard level that doesn’t make sense for newcomers.

Nikayla

Works: I enjoyed the lack of voiceover or any lines.

Doesn’t: I didn’t like the over the shoulder angle.

Antonia

Works: Close ups and sound effects. The cat!

Doesn’t: Some of the editing was a little off.

Ethan

Works: I liked the added lighting on top.

Doesn’t: I wish there was audio or music.

Tyler

Works: The projection was awesome.

Doesn’t: The shakiness irked me a little.

Bekzod

Works: The format in which it was presented. It being on instagram is a perfect representation of this.

Doesn’t: It would be even better if each one were a reel so you could get the full effect.

Sara

Works: The different shots were REALLY cool.

Didn’t: The music choices didn’t fit in my opinion.

Saomi

Works: The drawings and the transitions between them were awesome.

Didn’t: The font was a little hard to read.

Sid

Works: The design of the animations are really good.

Didn’t: The speed was off a little bit and/or needed a strobe light to see it better? 

Gaige

Works: The sound effects for each stage were really good.

Didn’t: The shakiness of some shots  as opposed to others.

Nada

Works: The interactivity works really well.

Didn’t: Rules needed a little more explaining.

Kayla

Works: The ambiance and sound effects worked really well.

Didn’t: Posters being photos is a little off because it doesn’t match the rest.

Gavin

Works: The lighting and ambiance worked well.
Didn’t: The constant stepping noise even with no movement.

Lily crawford

Use of  light to show the murder worked well

Would have liked Dramatic music during interrogation

 Gabby Thomas

Shot well 

Looked at camera a couple times

Murro Gill

Very fluid and good sound effects

Longer

Aleena Sargeant

360 is cool

Could have had better angle

Custom Game

Good color scheme and setup

Better sound

Nikayla Haynes

Bloopers were funny and easy to follow story

Different angles

Antonia V

Cat person was great and good concept

Green screen could’ve been better

Ethan

Very good lighting

Could have had sound

Tyler Lucas

Good visuals

Wanted more donkey kong

Bekzhod

The concept of making someone scroll ia cool

Want more

Sara

Good quality

Clips were little too long or short

Saomi J

Very clean transitions and very personable

Wanted more to the background

Sid Crabtree

Good design

Speed of spinning

Noah S

Very good work with mixing animation and real life

Consistency in art

Nada

Good concept

Should have more rules

Kayla B

Good quality of animation and audio

Wish it was longer and understood more story

Gavin

I like the lack of color

Sound effects could be adjusted

Lilly Clifford 

One thing that works: the timing of the conversation was well paced. 

One thing that doesn’t: potentially move the angle over a bit to refrain from the glare on the camera.

Gabriella Thomas

One thing that works:  im not sure if this was meant to be some sort of thriller but the silence gave the video an eerie feeling.

One thing that doesn’t: the close up shot with the coffee cup before walking away should have been slightly trimmed to prevent seeing it be picked up again 

Murro Gill

One thing that works: the sound effects were very soothing.

One thing that doesn’t: there were a few shots where your finger came into view but weren’t extremely distracting 

Aileena Sargeant 

One thing that works:  the still shots were fascinating

One thing that doesn’t: im sure this happened when uploading the video/rmu wifi but the quality was a bit grainy 

Guy in the wife beater🧍🏽‍♀️

One thing that works:  both the color scheme and quality of the game itself look great 

One thing that doesn’t: possibly add a clear objective/goal to the game 

Antonia Valeri

One thing that works:  I love that the idea was a person shrinking into a doll house while using the house from coraline 

One thing that doesn’t: the green screen cut out quite a bit but overall this was great 

Ethan Bookbinder

One thing that works:  the lighting matching on both the photo and the background page worked really well

One thing that doesn’t: i have no recommendations, s/o jjk

Tyler Lucas 

One thing that works:  the projection/stop motion worked out really well

One thing that doesn’t: possibly framing the projection a bit more 

Bekzod Nurboev

One thing that works:  I like that we were made to scroll the projection on our own phones, very interactive 

One thing that doesn’t: rather than leaving it as photos alone possibly turn them into a stop motion video 

Sara Krim

One thing that works:  the music change used to build up the suspension was amazing.

One thing that doesn’t: I think possibly making the light fade back to the regular kind would’ve made it seamless 

Saomi Jimenez 

One thing that works:  the drawings were very cute & because I’ve seen the trend it’s very fitting

One thing that doesn’t: possibly move the song credits out the way 

Sidney Crabtree

One thing that works:  the outer rims movement was quite mesmerizing 

One thing that doesn’t: the inner rims movement makes the images loose detail very easily 

Noah Schardt

One thing that works:  the incorporation of animation and real world visuals went together extremely well

One thing that doesn’t: no complaints I loved this

Gaige Stebler

One thing that works:  the animation at the beginning was quite smooth, sid dancing was my favorite part

One thing that doesn’t: the baby audio could have been slightly turned down 

Nada Almatani

One thing that works:  the graphic quality on this video look really nice 

One thing that doesn’t: the rules were a bit confusing at first but after testing it’s cool

Kayla Bowman

One thing that works:  the lighting tracked very well with the door being opened 

One thing that doesn’t: possibly try white text 

Gavin Raabe

One thing that works:  the hand in frame like old indie games was a nice touch

One thing that doesn’t: the walking audio could have been synced a bit better

Project 1: Murder Mystery

Love the humor, timing of conversations, and good use of light.

better actors???

Project 2: Stop motion

Love the use of sounds and music.

why the different form of text to speech one on a black screen and other on paper.

Project 3: 360

Love the sounds, video wasn’t too jumpy, same with photos.

sounds on the other hand were a little too loud.

Project 4: Video Game

Art style is fun and creative, love the kitty style. reminds me of an older cat mobile game.

Learning mode? Why a theater?

Project 5: Procrastinator

Feels like a part two from the perfect human you made! Love the ticking clock. Bloopers!!!!!

More perspectives?

Project 6: Dollhouse

Love the use of sounds and perspectives. The cat noises gave a funny sense of humor.

I almost wish when you were walking around, you weren’t stuck in one place.

Project 7: Stop motion/light

Love the use of light, it really helps bring it to life.

Wish there was audio

Project 8: Game stop motion

Love the lighting, use of creativity. different Marios!!

Wish there was some barrel action.

Project 9: doom scrolling

love the story and use of photos.

wish there was a video version.

Project 10: Panic Vido game

Love the lighting!!!!, nice use of different angles.

turn music down a little bit

Project 11: trend self potrait

love the colorful background, characters drawn very well!

The only thing with the background is it takes away from your wonderful drawings

Project 12: Xolo trope

Love the designs. create way to use this method.

Wish there was identification on how fast it’s supposed to spin.

Project 13: animation/video baking

love the mix of animation and video so cute!!! music fits with the cute theme.

make sure you have art consistency.

Project 14: improvisation

good use of humor adding animation into reality. call back to the perfect human.

a little choppy animation. dancing scene could’ve been a little shorter.

Project 15: game and video, dice

love the different outcomes

rules a little hard to understand.

Project 16: animation and audio

love the use of audio and lighting, animation is very consistent.

wish the video was a little longer, posters feel a little out of place.

Project 17: video and game, murder mystery 2

black and white made it less over stimulating, love the idea of merging game and video

wish the walking sounds stopped when the character stopped walking. sound got annoying fast.

LILY CLIFFORD

WORKS: Use of light as a prop, humor, timing

DOESN’T: Take more advantage of the light and have it be used more/play a bigger role. Audio quality wasn’t the best.

GABBY THOMAS

WORKS: Different angles and shots. Good audio for the environmental sound effects

DOESN’T: Lack of voiceover/audio made it a bit boring. Some shots went on too long. Looking at the camera broke immersion.

MURRO GILL

WORKS: Storytelling, stop-motion, emotional appeal, different medias, sound effects & music

DOESN’T: Transitions with paper was blurry, tripod seen in some scenes, pacing was a little fast

AILEENA SARGEANT

WORKS: 360 shot is very cool, lighting in photos is very nice, Perks of Being A Wallflower reference

DOESN’T: Audio is loud and slightly distracting

CHRISTIAN

WORKS: Concept, executed theme & obstructions well, flash game vibes

DOESN’T: Gameplay & objective feels lacking

NIKAYLA HAYNES

WORKS: Good acting, camera angles, relatable concept, clock effect, ending note & bloopers were funny

DOESN’T: Video too long, music got repetitive

ANTONIA VALERI

WORKS: Concept, editing, interacting with environment, the “cat”, sound effects with piano, humor

DOESN’T: Green screen effect cutting off legs, sometimes Toni wasn’t proportional to the rest of the house

TYLER LUCAS

WORKS: Stop motion, concept, different sprites

DOESN’T: Projected image covered Mario when climbing the ladder

BEKZOD N

WORKS: Concept is very unique and interactive. Plays well into the irony of being a social media account when the subject is doomscrolling. 

DOESN’T: Having an easier way to engage with it, could be longer

SARA KRIM

WORKS: Great camera quality & angles, lighting change with actor’s emotions

DOESN’T: Pacing felt a little slow & repetitive, music didn’t really fit the first half

SAOMI JIMENEZ

WORKS: Many different mediums of 4D, loved the trend, good concept, personally significant

DOESN’T: Not super engaging

SID CRABTREE

WORKS: Concept of combining things that he loved. Rotoscope works very well.

DOESN’T: Could have 3D aspects to make it more interesting. Fix frame rates.

NOAH SCHARDT

WORKS: Mix of IRL & animation, music fits vibe

DOESN’T: Consistency in hand-drawn elements.

GAIGE STEBLER

WORKS: Transitions of a child growing up was smooth. Turning a software problem into something comedic was a good way to make light of a bad situation

DOESN’T: Audio is loud, animation is shaky.

JANA

WORKS: Unique idea, some results are very funny, engaging/interactive

DOESN’T: Could use real dice, don’t fully understand the objective.

KAYLA BOWMAN

WORKS: Animation, use of lighting in animation, emotional appeal, audio

DOESN’T: Too short, left wanting more.

GAVIN RAABE

WORKS: First person POV works well, reminds me of a point-and-click game. Use of greyscale helps set the mood, sound effects

DOESN’T: Audio too loud, walking sound is repetitive

Murro: I think the sound effects worked really well. The shadow was a little distracting.

Aileena: The 360 camera worked well. Its hard to follow when you are controlling the camera angle.

Chrystian: I think the colors fit well with the Pittsburgh theme. Maybe add something to the crowns.

Nikayla: I like the effect with the clock. The video dragged on at times as the logging into the accounts took a while.

Toni: I like the piano sound effect and the cat. Sometimes your legs cut off and weren’t fully in frame.

Ethan: The lighting works very well. Some music would be nice.

Tyler: The projection is clear. The camera was shaky and it was a little distracting.

Bekzod: I like the idea. Maybe add a little more to it.

Sara: The camera angles were good. The lighting got a little messed up but overall it was a great video.

Saomi: The overall idea was very creative. Maybe choose a solid color background.

Sid: I like the idea. Adjusting the speed would help.

Gabby: I liked the different camera angles. Sometimes you looked at the screen.

Noah: I liked the graphics, they were very creative. The animations started floating at the end which was a little distracting.

Gaige: The animation was very good. Adobe messing up was disappointing but the dancing at the end was funny.

Kayla: I like the details in the animation. Add a drop shadow on the posters on the wall.

Gavin: I like the sound effects.

Jana: I like the game concept. Maybe some rules posted would make it easier to understand.

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