{"id":16986,"date":"2026-05-06T17:55:02","date_gmt":"2026-05-06T21:55:02","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/?p=16986"},"modified":"2026-05-06T17:55:02","modified_gmt":"2026-05-06T21:55:02","slug":"4d-final-critique-notes-sara-krim","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/?p=16986","title":{"rendered":"4D Final Critique Notes &#8211; Sara Krim"},"content":{"rendered":"\n<p><strong>4D Final Feedback:&nbsp;<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Lily:<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Using light as a prop, the sound effects<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Better audio (more clear and loud)<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Gabby:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Variety of shots and settings<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Add music or focus more on the sounds. Also add some sort of indicator on what the story is<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Murrow:<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Sound effects!!! And story<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Work on camera movement and materials<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Alieena:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: The speed changing and light experience, the 360 interactive experience\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would change: Make it into a shot sequence for presentation purposes and story purposes, add music to heighten emotional feel (but do keep revving and things like that)\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Chrystian:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Color scheme and grey pads\/platforms work well for the PGH feel, definitely entertaining and something I would play in middle school<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: UI when controls pop up (background could be blurred for easier reading) maybe add a learning mode<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Nikayla:<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Camera movement following subject, crossfaded clock, story is fitting and relatable<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Make the opening blackboard thing shorter, get different angles from where subject is sitting<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Antonia:<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Very humorous<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Make it horizontal, better editing\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Ethan:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Frame speed, lighting<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Work with the cropping (it felt weird), maybe a black background?<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Tyler:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Game works well and stopmotion really tapped into that with the graphics<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Would crop better, get a tripod because it was shaky<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Bedzok:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Making us actually scroll was super interactive and worked with the point of the story<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Make this into a stop motion and have that on the instagram (but keep the photos\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Saomi:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Editing is very smooth, makes sense, aesthetically pleasing\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Maybe make it quieter<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Sidney:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Spinning it, showing the \u201cexperiment\u201d\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Add more shots, close up of the movement and subjects\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Noah:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: The mix on animation and real life (being shown on tv) and animation helping cook\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Maybe some foley work\/sound effects\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Gaige:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: The animation art style, black and white to color\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: I would make the person in the animation do the adobe messed up, and then have him dance and then switch to irl person dancing, sound levels\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Jana:<\/strong>\u00a0<\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: Its interactive and luck based (it fits that)\u00a0<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: The negative and positive confuses me a bit. Maybe having the cards more random, maybe have them be like tarot cards and you pick the number, flip the card and your fortune is there<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Kayla:\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: I like the message and the animation is good, loved the flicker<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: I would love to see more\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Gavin:<\/strong>\u00a0<\/p>\n\n\n\n<ul class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>What works: The story, narrative game type of perspective (the hand is like granny or roblox if you know what I mean)<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>What I would do: Footsteps are pretty sporadic and don\u2019t seem accurate, maybe add some tense music\u00a0<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>4D Final Feedback:&nbsp; Lily: Gabby:\u00a0 Murrow: Alieena:\u00a0 Chrystian:\u00a0 Nikayla: Antonia: Ethan:\u00a0 Tyler:\u00a0 Bedzok:\u00a0 Saomi:\u00a0 Sidney:\u00a0 Noah:\u00a0 Gaige:\u00a0 Jana:\u00a0 Kayla:\u00a0 Gavin:\u00a0<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":299,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"footnotes":""},"categories":[1],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-16986","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-uncategorized"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/16986","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/users\/299"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcomments&post=16986"}],"version-history":[{"count":2,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/16986\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":17111,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/16986\/revisions\/17111"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fmedia&parent=16986"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcategories&post=16986"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/rmu.andrewyames.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Ftags&post=16986"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}